What do you see wrong with the title and contents of this report?
— From “The Chain Gang”, part of the online Orlando Sentinel:
|Car kills cyclist on Orange AvenuePosted: 20 Mar 2010 09:50 PM PDT
A bicyclist died Friday night after he was struck by a vehicle on South Orange Avenue in Orlando.
The man was riding his bicycle southbound on the east side of 3100 block of South Orange about 8:20 p.m., according to the Orlando Police Department.
An unknown vehicle traveling northbound in the outside lane honked its horn and swerved into the inside lane. The bicyclist fell into the outside lane of northbound traffic, where he was struck by a 2004 Chrysler that had been traveling behind the unknown vehicle.
Darnell Hariston, 33, of Orlando, was behind the wheel of the Chrysler.
The bicyclist was transported to Orlando Regional Medical Center, where he died. His next of kin have not yet been notified of his death.
No charges are pending, according to police.
What is wrong with the title?
Is the reporting clear on what happened? How could it be made clearer?
What additional information is missing and would be helpful to know?
Any incorrect information?
Is there any other “message” being delivered with this report?
I don’t like reporting that is done without some thought put into what is being written. If this report is simply re-gurgetated info from OPD, why bother reporting?
I assume “The Chain Gang” is posting articles that are of interest to the cycling community. Can anyone tell me what my interest, as a cyclist, should be in this article? Why should it matter to me?